Woman at the Beach (Minor Revision)
(Hello, this is me having some fun with free verse again. What do the repetends do for you in the beginning?)Woman at the Beach (Revised)The waves reachingreaching further furtheronto the shore...
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Sam, this comes so close to NOT being free verse, that I keep wanting to see "peaches" and "reaches":The wave reaches--reaches further--furtherand, at the last:The wave reaches,recedes into the...
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I'm glad you like the mood, Margaret.I'm finally seventeen. Woohoo. I still can't buy cigarettes, alcohol, or porn. Well. This is a wasted year.
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Hi Sam,I like this - but I think you could hone it more,A challenge:re-write it as a haiku.Re being 17.Of course you can buy alchohol, cigarettes and porn - it's just illegal!Once it's legal, then the...
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Stick with the alcohol, though not enough of it to dull your poetic ability. Porn is so goddam boring.Margaret
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